Tuesday, November 6, 2007
Thesis Statements
First, please post your thesis statement. Second, review two of your classmates' thesis statements. In the review, note whether the subject and focus are asserted well and also whether the thesis passes the so-what test. In other words, would you be interested in reading the whole paper.
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Thesis: In John Updikes, A&P the characters Sammy, Stockie, and Queenie prove to be the most important element of the story.
Thesis: "The Ones Who Walked Away From Omelas" by Ursula Guin adresses the issue that people would rather be mindless and happy then acknowledge the human suffering that occurs in the world.
Thesis: Here Joyce uses his favorite motifs and the externalization his character’s emotions in the setting to explore the one theme prevalent in all of his work and perhaps the only thing he never quite understood, his young self.
(comment on tylers thesis)- a lot of peope would argue that setting is the most important element in A&P. to avoid unnecessary controversy, you might want to be a bit more specific and say why character is the most important thing.
Thesis: In Wright's story "The Man Who Was Almost a Man," Dave thinks owning a gun will give him the respect of being viewed as a man.
Response to Tylers Thesis- What about them makes them the most important elements in the story. I think if you made more sense of what you are going to talk about the characters you mentioned, the rest of the story would be more appealing.
Response to Zachs Thesis- Shorten up the thesis and dont mention words like theme or character. Get more specific and it will tell the reader exactly where you are going to take the rest of your paper. This will make your paper more interesting. Keep the thesis short and simple.
Thesis: "A Man Who Was Almost a Man", written by Richard Wright, use's Wright's southern heritege to bring the setting in the story to life in aspects of time period, where, and physical context.
Review on Tyler's Thesis: I think you have a good start, but you are missing a present tense verb in you thesis. Without that your thesis is not attention grabbing.
Review on Samantha's Thesis: In you thesis I think you got all points and neccesities across. It did make me want to read more!!!!
Thesis: Sandra Cisneros' "One Holy Night" is written in a very rare, controversial first person point of view in which the narrator is a young latina girl.
Tyler: Maybe instead of saying that Sammy, Stokie and queenie are the most important elelment, say that character itself is the most important element then elaborate with specific characters.
Daniel: What is your elelment? The element you are writing about should definately be present in your thesis.
Thesis: LeGuin's ," The Ones Who Walk away from Omela's" uses the towns happiness for the suffering of one to generate her story.
Kurt Vonnegut,Jr's, "Harrison Bergeron", uses characters to make a personal and empathetic connection with the readers.
Response to Zach thesis: Ti think that the acutall thesis needs to be shorter and less obvious. This way the reader has something to learn through out your paper.
To Dillan's: I think that your thesis is really good and i think that with the paper this thesis statement will allow you to go in many directions with your paper.
To Tyler: I think that your thesis has potential to expand. I feel like this may not be able to get you enough room to create a longer paper.
To Samantha: I think that your thesis will allow you to create a long and interesting paper. I like how you connected your thesis statement to real life.
In Ralph Ellison's "Battle Royal", the narrator's beliefs are shaped by his misinterpretation of his grandfather's last words.
Responses:
Trisha:I understand what you are trying to prove but the way it is worded makes it sound like more of a fact, rather than a thesis.
Daniel:I think your thesis is good and there is a lot of textual evidence you will be able to find.
Thesis: Selfishness plays a huge role in Ursula K. LeGun's "The One Who Walks Away from Omelas", the townspeople have to face many hard decisions about whether or not to help the suffering boy.
Responces:
To Mallory: I think you grabbed my attention and others. It is a very clear thesis and outlines all you body paragraphs to come.
To Zach: The flow of you beginging sentence is a little off, I think you could have used better word choices
Thesis: In the short story "Harrison Bergeron", Kurt Vonnegut uses an extreme example of egalitarianism to show that democracy is the only moral form of government.
Response:
Samantha- I think that your thesis is very good and should make a great paper.
Nikki- I think your thesis is very well done. It is clear and should make for a good paper.
Thesis: In Kurt Vonnegut's "Harrison Bergeron", equality and conformity are demanded among the community, leaving the reader to think if it's ever really going happen in the future.
(in response to tyler): i believe they are very important elements, and so much of the story revolves around them.
(in response to mallory): this is a very well done response and can leave the reader to knowing what to expect in your essay.
Thesis: The protagonist's sanity in "The Yellow Wallpaper" yb William Faulkner is solely dependent on the elements surrounding her.
Response to Tyler: I like yours because it is broad and you can go in several different directions with it.
Nikkole: I love your thesis. I think it is great that you went with the element of the grandfather's last words. I think you can generate a great paper from that thesis.
Thesis: in Vonnegut Jr's "Harrison Bergeron" taking the mentality of every one is equal to the extent of puting hanycaps on someones body to restrict them from being better at somthing than a nother being is wrong.
ty i think your thesis is good. could use some more explanation but it should set up your paper to be good an long.
daniel i like your thesis. everything is there and it tells what needs to be told. it doesnt tell too much so it will leave who ever is readin it with some thinkin before they get to the rest of the paper.
The setting in Kurt Voight Jr.'s "Harrison Bergeron" creates rebellion in a supposedly fair and equal futuristic society.
Katie: I really like your thesis statement. It makes me want to read more and it doesn't say too much. I also liked the way you said the townspeople had many decisions to face because you can later tell about the decisions in your body paragraphs.
Mallory: I really liked how you related the author's background with the way the story was written. That was a good observation. One thing, instead of saying 'where' you could say 'place'.
Mallory: I like how you included the authors heritage into your thesis it makes it more interesting and your author more credible.
Megan: I liked how you incorporated the fact that the author uses his characters to connect with the reader, it makes me want to read more and find out how he uses the characters to his advantage.
Thesis: In Vonnegut's "Harrison Bergeron", the unambiguous futuristic setting is intended to allow the author to address and explore issues of his era, not to warn readers about a likely dystopian future or to make predictions.
(comment on samantha neff's thesis)- the authors name is Ursula Le Guin (you need the Le and might want her middle initial, K. because she goes by Ursula K. Le Guin. it's always better to use the name you find on the cover of the authors book.)other than that its good, but you might need to reword a bit.
Megan: I feel that your thesis may be a little too vague. Isn't it the purpose of characters in most stories to create connections to the reader?
Trisha: Your thesis seems to me to be a bit too obvious. These seem like facts that were stated outright by the author in "One Holy Night". Your thesis comes off as more of a general review than it does as an analysis.
Thesis.
Kurt Vonnegut's short story, "Harrison Bergeron", The Handicap General thinks putting handicaps on everyone will create the "perfect" world.
in response to Robert, i think that you could simplify your thesis just a little bit. it's good but kind of confusing.
in response to dillan, i like yours i think that it draws the reader in.
Thesis: In Louise Erdrich's, "The Red Convertible", Lyman is a man with a mission; his goal is to recreate the relationship he had with his brother prior to the war.
Samantha: I think that you did a good job on your thesis statement it makes me want to read the rest of your paper.
Trisha: You also did a good job on your thesis statement. You got your point across and still left the reader wanting to read more.
Thesis: In "The Lady With the Pet Dog", Joyce Carol Oates uses a cyclical plot structure to mix up the sequence of events to create more mystery, suspense and excitement.
comment to mallory's: Very good thesis. It makes me want to know more about the setting and how the Southern roots play into the story.
comment to daniel's: Your thesis does not quite tell me what element you are going to talk about. Maybe adding in a little more about Dave could help to make it more clear.
Thesis: Paul, the protagonist, in Willa Cather's "Paul's Case", proves to be an emotionally unstable young man.
In response to Samantha's thesis: this sounds like a goood thesis to me it gets straight to the point and shows that is how the rest of your paper is going to be.
In response to Courtney's thesis: your thesis sounds great very creative word choice if i read this i would want to read the rest of your paper.
Wrights,"The Man Who Was Almost A Man," uses an object to symbolize the internal struggle for manhood during adolescence
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